Stop Write Hear art movie

This is my movie me my buddy and my group made

Cyberbullying

There were two boys who lived in a small town called Cybertown. Their names were Connor and Harry.

Connor had blue hair with the powers of Venox Skyland and his hobby was watching tech or doing some art.harry was a kid with brown hair a little taller than Connor and had the power of strength  

One day Connor and Harry were texting to each other but they kept getting texts from Pei and Mob. Pei and Mob was a group called the cyber bands that make peoples lives a misery so they make scams.

When Connor got a scam from The Cyber Bands the message was “Connor we know where you live we got your number soon we are going to beat you up”.

Connor set a meeting with Harry. Connor told him the story but Pei and Mob interrupted the sentence and was about to hit Connor but Harry found a plug connected to Pei and Mob.

Harry pulled the plug. the cyber bands started to malfunction and overheat and they are powered down for good.

People were safe from The Cyber bands. And the lesson of the day was making sure you are cyber safe from cyberbullies and make your websites

My Feedback by my buddy

First of all good start and Nice name cyber town because I think that you have the most amazing ideas ever for you to have.

So much great writing I love it so good

I loved this story you could be famous just you need to change some of the stories in the final part.

And my final which is this story

There were two boys who lived in a small town called Cybertown. Their names were Connor and Harry. They were best friends ever since they meet walking home from their favorite movie. It was that time that they realized they were next-door neighbors.

Connor had blue hair with the powers of Venox Skyland and his hobby was watching tech or doing some art. Harry was a kid with brown hair a little taller than Connor and had the power of strength.

One day Connor and Harry were texting to each other but they kept getting texts from Pei and Mob. Pei and Mob was a group called the cyber bands that make peoples lives a misery so they make scams.

When Connor got a scam from The Cyber Bands the message was “Connor we know where you live we got your number soon we are going to beat you up”. Connor set a meeting with Harry. Connor told him the story but Pei and Mob interrupted the sentence and was about to hit Connor but Harry found a plug connected to Pei and Mob.

Harry pulled the plug. The cyber bands started to malfunction and overheat and they are powered down for good. People were safe from The Cyber bands and the lesson of the day was making sure you are cyber safe from cyberbullies.